For a non Rika related note, I wanted to ask if it's strictly necessary to have all the text referring to Maxine's body type as a negative thing in the beginning of the game? It seems inconsequential to the game as a whole and only serves to drive home, intentionally or not, that the main reason Kayla forgets she exists is because she's not attracted to Maxine's body type. This could be alienating to players who aren't skinny themselves, who should be given the chance to find this game just as much a positive escape as anyone else. This especially stands out because Kayla makes no other comments about anyone else's appearance except for being attracted to their bodies. Since Kayla is into Evie, and this part doesn't really add anything, seems like it might be better to just take the stuff about Maxine's figure out. That's my feedback, thanks for your time!
Volleyball Heaven 0.7.5
What's New in 0.7.5
- fixed two small plot-holes in Jade's path: when you're hired you can choose if to go shopping with her or Lana. Choosing Lana was originally supposed to end the romance but I managed to still make it work adding variants to some lines of texts (would be bad to just have a sudden "romance is over" over a simple and apparently harmless choice!)
- added more info about Norma Sex CG in the gallery screen, explaining how you unlock it (since you can have sex with her in two occasions but only one has the CG)
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OK thanks I know the writer read the comments too, so I'll let him decide how to handle this.
I understand it might be a creative choice because Kayla's not exactly supposed to be worldly, but I just wanted to mention, that as a Japanese american woman myself, it kind of makes me uncomfortable that Kayla keeps refering to Rika as "Asian".
Can you explain better? Why makes you uncomfortable? (as non-native English speaker I don't understand)
I'll let the game writer know anyway :) thanks
I appreciate it, thank you!
Because Asian is general, implies no difference between the many different peoples from Asia, and implies that we are all the same . It's like saying Latin or Caucasian instead of bothering to find out what country someone's from. Also, saying it all the time implies that there's nothing else noteworthy about her and is reductive at best and fetishistic at worst. Like saying a white guy does things whitely all the time instead of letting him do things because he's himself .
I see thanks for the explanation. Shouldn't be a problem to change it since I searched for the word asian and is used 5-6 times only (referring to Rika) in the whole story so it's a simple change :) Thanks
Great, thank you so much!
This is a more minor note, but I would also caution against referring to her as an "exotic fruit" in the sex scene as it would be very easy to take this the wrong way and referring to non white people as exotic can be othering and uncomfortable.